The prompt is in bold.
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Ma and Pa were gone and it was time to sell the old homestead. As Mary looked out from her high rise city apartment at the concrete, memories came flooding back.
It’s true, the smell of freshly mowed grass can stay with you for years, for decades, so could Ma's apple pies baking in the kitchen. She could almost see the laundry fluttering in the country breeze and the old oak tree.
For a moment, she had visions of moving back there. Then reality set in. He was still there in town and she could never forget or forgive what he did and she trembled. No, she couldn't go back.
24 comments:
Nice use of the prompt! Makes me want to read more. Just what did that cad do?? Kathy
Hmmmm. Feels like the first page of a romance novel. Maybe there's more to this story...
=)
Sounds like a lot more story could follow this one!
Oh, but you must go back so we will know all about "him." Take us with you in a blog post?
Oh another cliff hanger! Great suspense with great evocative descriptions!
Loved the pieces you added to the fresh mown grass. All so evocative of simpler times in a simpler place.
I enjoyed the image of laundry fluttering AND I enjoyed a twist at the end.
Leave it to a man to mess up everything! :) I don't know what he did, but I don't want to go back there either...even though it sounds so nice!
Malisa
Very nice job. I pictured the scene and felt the reality! This could be a great story
Very well done! Great story with vivid imagery!
This is good, I want more.
Ma 'n Pa...love it!
I too would like to read more...what did he do???
Oh what did he do? Hope another prompt let's you tell us more - great story!
grand opening,
hope for more.
leaves me wondering what she doesent want to go back to. nice!
my first centus is up!
http://www.mummy-diaries.com/2010/06/saturday-centus-returned.html
Ok where is part 2 please
Are you going to finish this or are you going to leave us hanging?!?!??! *grins at you!*
Very well done Viki...I hope she can get past the past and return home some day...wish I knew where that was:-) Peace and blessings
What a sad story, you sure sucked me in! Thanks for visiting my blog!
Have a great week!
I loved this. You totally tricked me there...I didn't see that twist coming at all!
OK, next 10,000 words, please!
Thanks for linking up!
Wow..another story begging to be told. Nice job.
Wow..another story begging to be told. Nice job.
This just really struck a chord with me. It sounds like the opening paragraph of a great novel. Keep it coming!
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