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Saturday, September 24, 2011

Saturday Centus #73

It's Saturday Centus again - in a nutshell, Jenny Matlock gives us a prompt from either herself or a guest submitter and then we have to write 100 or words less related to the prompt (the prompt doesn't count toward the 100 words) Then link it up to her blog. It's open until the following Saturday, so that means you have all week to participate by either reading or writing.  The prompt is in blue. http://jennymatlock.blogspot.com/2011/09/saturday-centus-he-said-she-said-they.html

This is a shake up week.  We can use 150 words plus the prompt.  It is all to be written in dialogue.  I rather enjoyed this shake up unlike last weeks, lol.


"Are you ready to go?"
"Does it look like I'm ready to go?"
"Are you seriously ordering another martini?"
"It is my birthday."
"This will be your 6th martini since we got here for dinner."
"So what; are you my dad?"
"Sometimes you make me feel like I have to be."
"Look Bill, I certainly don't need another father.  I am an adult with children."
"Yeah, children you can't take care of at times because your sloshed".
"Let's not go there again."
"You are going to have to do something, Barb.  I can't be worried if the kids are going to be safe with you."
"You're crazy!"
"I'm crazy?  I'm serious.  If you don't get your drinking under control, I'm divorcing you and taking the kids."
"You just go ahead and try.  We'll see who wins."
"I have enough people that will back me up because of your drinking.  You are unfit.   Now let's go."
















19 comments:

Karen S. said...

OOps they better beware...too much drinking can lead to....great run on your dialogue I'm having trouble not joining in with them all...it just all runs way too smooth...and fun...Thank you Jenny, this week is total fun..even without pictures!

Rawknrobyn.blogspot.com said...

Sounds like he has a good point. Good for you for writing about an alcoholic mommy (vs daddy) in a very realistic scenario.
xoRobyn

Anna said...

What a slice of life. It feels real. I am sure there are lots of real conversations like this everywhere all the time.
Well done.
Best wishes,
Anna
Anna's SC wk 73'Lunch with B&V'

Judie said...

Yikes! I hope she chooses her children over booze!!! Good take on the prompt!

June Freaking Cleaver said...

Sad part is that this story happens all too often.

Good job.

Deborah said...

Very realistic and very well written!

Wanderer said...

Good job on this. Seems that alcohol causes so much trouble...I wonder why folks don't stay away from it.

Bones said...

Great post. Followed :)

cj Schlottman said...

Great dialogue and a tough story! Great Centus!

Namaste...........cj

PS - Thanks for reading and commenting on my entry.

Namaste..........cj

Ames said...

Oops sounds like fightin words. Drunks dont know they are drunk or that they have a problem. Excellent dialogue Viki!~Ames

Kat said...

Ouch! This was really well done, but such a sad subject. Good job with a tough prompt.

Dazee Dreamer said...

that was really truly sad. you did a great job.

Kathy Felsted Usher said...

So real! Good one.

Rekha said...

I am more used to seeing alcoholic daddies out here....but the scenario is changing and I liked how you gave the guy a decent role for a change. Well done.

jabblog said...

This sounds too true to be funny. Well observed dialogue:-)

laurie @ bargain hunting said...

Well done. Working in a law office, I hear similar accusations frequently. laurie

Tgoette said...

Such a great story! You rocked this dialog challenge with a wonderful and original take! Well done!

Bethe77 said...

It is sad to think that these convesations actually do take place. Great write. Love how you put this scene together.
Blessings

Jenny said...

Believable...tough...heart-breaking...

This made my heart hurt...it was that good! I know you're having a great time! Give PJ a hug from me, too!