This is an ongoing story I've decided to write and put on my blog every
Monday. Please excuse the errors, I'm only doing limited editing.
Constructive criticism welcome. I wish I had a cute button on the side
where the story could go but I don't know how to make a button. Even if
I did I wouldn't know how to link up the story LOL. So if you miss a
chapter, you'll have to look at my sidebar for it. The first chapter
was written on October 23, 2011 so that should at least be some help,
ha.
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My breakfast came about 8:15, a nice girl
brought it in all cheery-like. She was a
tall girl, thin and looked to be in about her 20’s. She said her name was
Cheryl. They must have a rule here, all employees must be cheery. She put the tray on a small table and then
left. I sat down and surveyed the
food. Eggs, bacon, toast, and small
glasses of juice, water, milk and coffee and it all tasted pretty good.
After I was done eating, I realized Julie
and Jerry would be here in about 30 minutes and I thought about where I would
put the things they were bringing. I had
everything all ready for them. All they
had to do was load it up in Jerry’s truck.
It should only take them one trip.
I thought about going out and looking around the facility a bit but I
wasn’t ready for that.
While I’m waiting for them I’ll tell you a
little about them. Jerry is my first
born, 40 years old. He’s been married to
his wife, Sue, for 20 years. He has two
children. Joshua is 17 and Amy is 15. Like I mentioned he’s a financial planner and
is very good at what he does. Since Hank
died, he’s helped me a lot around my house.
We had issues with him when he was growing up but we don’t need to get
into that now, there will be time later I’m sure. He’s the spitting image of his father. Tall, handsome, a good build, and black wavy
hair.
My daughter, Julie, 36 years old is
married to Ralph for 16 years. They have
two children; fraternal twins. Wait for
this… Their names are Jack and Jill.
They thought it would be cute. I
remember at the time thinking how much they would be teased because of it. Now that they are 13, I can only
imagine. Julie’s a Pediatrician. Her husband’s a surgeon. I wonder how they do everything they do with
the kids and their jobs but they somehow manage things. She favors me. She has hazel eyes, thin and auburn hair
although my hair’s long turned gray. I
don’t mean to brag but I was quite the stunner back in the day.
“Hi Mom.”
“Hi Julie.” “Jerry and Josh have
the truck in front. They are seeing if
they can get something to put your stuff on so it’s easier to bring in. How was your first night?” “It was wonderful. Everyone’s so nice here and my breakfast was
just so yummy. It will be so nice not to
have to worry about cooking or doing dishes.”
“Really mom? I always thought you loved to cook.” “Sure I did when you kids lived at home and
your father was alive. It’s not so fun
when you have to cook only for yourself.”
“Oh by the way, Stella called me last
night.” “And..?” “I did just what you
told me. I said you didn’t have a phone
yet and when you got one you would call her and tell her when she could
visit.” “Thank you Julie, you know how
Stella can be. I love her like a sister
but sometimes we don’t see eye to eye and this happens to be one of those
times.” “She’s just worried about your
decision just like we are.” “Let’s not
go there again.” “Okay, I’m going to see
how Jerry and Josh are doing. Do you
want to come with me?” “No, I think I’ll start emptying these drawers and put
the stuff on the bed so they can move this small dresser out before they bring
in mine. You go dear,” and Julie left the room.
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2 comments:
Very nice, but I wouldn't add the paragraph where you describe the kids. Let that information come out in the interactions and dialogue. It's better to "show" and not "tell".
You know what. I agree with Julie on her comment!
I like the brief introduction but leave me wanting more.
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