The quieter you become the more you can hear ~ Ram Dass



Saturday, February 16, 2013

Saturday Centus #147



The prompt this week is:   'I'VE OFFICIALLY REACHED CRITICAL MASS'

 Number of words:  105.   (including the five words of the prompt)

Style of writing: Any

Additional Pictures: Any

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“Tom, I have something I need to talk to you about.”


“Um… it’s Friday, bowling night.”

“Don’t go. We need to talk, please.”

“I’ll be late” he said leaving.

She picked up the phone and called her girlfriend.  I’ve officially reached critical mass.  It’s time.”

“Okay, you can stay here” and they hung up.

Like a robot, she went to the bedroom, got her suitcases and packed. 

She reread the letter.  The woman said they’d been meeting every Friday night for years.

She took her wedding rings off, putting them on the kitchen counter on top of the letter and walked out.


 

9 comments:

Tracy Cook said...

Oh my gosh I genuinely had a letter like that , from one of my exes girlfriends friends . It proved what I had suspected for months. Sadly had no where to go so stayed here

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Sue said...

Ohhh...that's good. And well done!

=)

Naila Moon said...

Oh not expected at all. Great Saturday Centus!

moondustwriter said...

too often it's not fiction or 105 words
great, realistic Centus

Karen S. said...

Sometimes returning to an empty house finally opens one's eyes! Bravo!

Judie said...

She left her rings? Can she spell "PAWN SHOP?"

Great take on the prompt!!!!

Jenny said...

Tom is a jerk!

I loved Judie's comment!

Bravo! Well written!