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Saturday, June 12, 2010

Saturday Centus #6

It's time for Saturday Centus.  Each Saturday Mr. Jenny at Jenny Matlock's gives a prompt and then with 100 words or less not counting the prompt we have to come up with a little story.  Go check it out. http://jennymatlock.blogspot.com/2010/06/saturday-centus-week-6.html

The prompt is in bold.
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Ma and Pa were gone and it was time to sell the old homestead.  As Mary looked out from her high rise city apartment at the concrete, memories came flooding back.   
 
It’s true, the smell of freshly mowed grass can stay with you for years, for decades, so could Ma's apple pies baking in the kitchen.  She could almost see the laundry fluttering in the country breeze and the old oak tree.   
 
For a moment, she had visions of moving back there.  Then reality set in. He was still there in town and she could never forget or forgive what he did and she trembled.  No, she couldn't go back.   
 

25 comments:

mbkatc230 said...

Nice use of the prompt! Makes me want to read more. Just what did that cad do?? Kathy

Sue said...

Hmmmm. Feels like the first page of a romance novel. Maybe there's more to this story...

=)

Bookie said...

Sounds like a lot more story could follow this one!

cjschlottman said...

Oh, but you must go back so we will know all about "him." Take us with you in a blog post?

jfb57 said...

Oh another cliff hanger! Great suspense with great evocative descriptions!

Cheryl said...

Loved the pieces you added to the fresh mown grass. All so evocative of simpler times in a simpler place.

My name is PJ. said...

I enjoyed the image of laundry fluttering AND I enjoyed a twist at the end.

Malisa said...

Leave it to a man to mess up everything! :) I don't know what he did, but I don't want to go back there either...even though it sounds so nice!

Malisa

Terra said...

Very nice job. I pictured the scene and felt the reality! This could be a great story

Tgoette said...

Very well done! Great story with vivid imagery!

misterjenny said...

This is good, I want more.

Vicki said...

Ma 'n Pa...love it!

Koby said...

I too would like to read more...what did he do???

easternsparkle said...

Oh what did he do? Hope another prompt let's you tell us more - great story!

Lady Banana said...

Yes, another one that leaves us wanting to know more..

Jingle said...

grand opening,
hope for more.

Tina said...

leaves me wondering what she doesent want to go back to. nice!

my first centus is up!

http://www.mummy-diaries.com/2010/06/saturday-centus-returned.html

Tracy said...

Ok where is part 2 please

Cathryn said...

Are you going to finish this or are you going to leave us hanging?!?!??! *grins at you!*

jeff campbell said...

Very well done Viki...I hope she can get past the past and return home some day...wish I knew where that was:-) Peace and blessings

mrs. c said...

What a sad story, you sure sucked me in! Thanks for visiting my blog!
Have a great week!

Jenny said...

I loved this. You totally tricked me there...I didn't see that twist coming at all!

OK, next 10,000 words, please!

Thanks for linking up!

Jewel said...

Wow..another story begging to be told. Nice job.

Jewel said...

Wow..another story begging to be told. Nice job.

Tina said...

This just really struck a chord with me. It sounds like the opening paragraph of a great novel. Keep it coming!